Assignment
17A- Elevator Pitch No. 2
2)
My video did not upload correctly last
time so unfortunately, I wasn’t able to receive any feedback on my last
elevator pitch. However, looking back, I definitely could’ve improved on my
inflection, flow and making more eye-contact with the hypothetical audience. I
tried to incorporate these tools in this elevator pitch. I also tried to
emphasize the threat of cyber-security and why it would be smart to purchase
this product right now. By heightening people’s sensitivity to the matter, I
hope it’d attract more potential customers.
3)
Based on my own assessment of elevator
pitch No.1, I tried to talk louder and annunciate between my words. In my first
pitch, there were times when I would mumble or wouldn’t be clearly audible. So,
I definitely made a concerted effort to be as clear as possible and make useful
hand gestures to help with the pitch. I also emphasized the reasons behind why
people should purchase this product. Last elevator pitch, although I touched on
why consumers should be interested in securing their private data, I didn’t
really highlight all the threats. In addition, I added a conclusion this time around.
During my first elevator pitch, there was more of an abrupt ending. This time I
ended the pitch with why it was better to be safe rather than sorry, and asked
the customers a direct question about what they were waiting for.
Hi Shivani!
ReplyDeleteThis is a great pitch! I can tell you've worked on making sure you are speaking loudly and with clear inflection. You seemed confident and comfortable in your delivery, and I can tell that you are passionate about your business idea. My one suggestion would be to try to memorize your pitch or put your script just below the camera because at some points I could tell you were not looking at the camera. But, I'm giving myself this piece of advice as well because it's so difficult to memorize!